She lies awake
in her field of suffering
remembering past mistakes.
In her bed of mourning,
the tears cascade;
the fears escape.
Once comforted by solitude
she tries to displace all,
to no avail.
She reaches out to him
and that feral feeling,
willing him to consent;
to take her out-stretched hand.
A whisper of the shadows
passes between
Now
and
Then.
Her hand recedes.
That which is no longer hers
tears a path inside
and
rips apart the scars
that could never fully heal.
Will she bleed for it?
Knowing the torture
of the passion to relieve,
she still can't turn away.
She was his hope.
He- her salvation.
But, mistakes come with comfort.
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Paths of the Past is an almost autobiographical epic poem (of sorts) started about 5 years ago and is still yet unfinished. It details a few major periods of my life - relationship-wise - and takes you down the emtional road I traveled along during each part.
Parts of this will have to be marked for Mature Content. Sorry guys! If you want to read it, and you can't due to the filter, I'll be happy to note it to you. I hope you enjoy and I'd appreciate any critiques you guys are willing to give.  Comments
 Wow, amazing so far.
Your work is amazing. Well done c: -- Proud My Chemical Romance Fan~ Proud Light Yagami hater & Mikami Teru lover~ Proud to have kissed a boy and a girl~ Proud Ball Jointed Doll owner~ __________ RIP MOGLE. I MIGHT NOT HAVE SAID IT OFTEN, BUT I LOVE YOU. __________ Cy~  Good pace. I think the really key note is "Will she bleed for it?" because from the way you put everything, you know she has to try and disassociate herself from her dilemna, so she would be asking it in 3rd person to herself, and everyone else as well. I love that.
I'm impressed with this one, even with it seeming simplistic.  This is very good. I do have one suggestion though: 'Ferial' should probably be 'feral' in this context (4th stanza).
Kudos on a job well done  -- your mom - rated 'e' for everyone.  --  "By The time you Read This you've already read it"clubs: ~=ManipulateThis ~=Digital-Art-Club ~=deviantARTcommunity ~=DarkArtists-Inc    Excellent job so far, my dear. Do continue. -- Band geek and proud of it!  (Do illiterate people get the full effect of Alphabet soup?) All those who believe in telekinesis, raise my hand. Smile, and the world will smile with you. Laugh and they'll all think you're on drugs.  -- Writers Block is my Arch Nemesis. It is Evil, and must be Destroyed. Admin for #theWrittenRevolution Proud member of =RawEm0tion  "She was his hope.
He- her salvation" its beautiful! -- "Crystallized, as I lay here and rest Eyes of glass stare directly at death From deep sleep I have broken away No one knows, no one hears what I say" |
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